Talk:Cannot Defy Death/@comment-38808443-20190326180137/@comment-36621215-20190327172545

It's pretty good. You got the plot down, and the detail is flexible for the most part. However, for example you could expand things like " Suddenly I heard a sound, and next thing was, I woke up in a room." In my experience, I kind of want to be specific to the reader. Where did you hear the sound? Who knocked you out (I get if you were trying to build up who the antagonist is but it's not one of my favored ways of doing it), and lastly, What "room" did you exactly wake up in? I'll leave you to this one, because I believe you as a writer. But if you'd like, I'll be creating a guide for this kind of stuff on the forum. So stay tuned if you want me to give you specific detail on this kind of stuff. Overall, this is a 9.4/10.