Talk:Potion Of Death/@comment-31651395-20180330055916

---CONCEPT

The idea of a potion that does these mysterious things are actually impressive ideas for your first time making a pasta. Plus, it's creative!

10/10

STORY EMOTION

However, the writer of the story sounds bored. Maybe try making him sound afraid in the next part! I'm looking forward to it!

5/10

-GRAMMAR--

It's moderate, but still good. Note that my grammar may be wosre.

6/10

OVERALL-

21/30

It's a nice pasta and I hope you continue it!