Talk:Batwing4 Beckons Me/@comment-26318250-20170714210558

Pretty nice story, however I felt like it went a bit too fast. I found it pretty hard to catch up with the story and such. I also did not particularly like how you put other Creepypastas in the story. They just felt kknd of out of place there. However, I did infact like how you made Null a girl, pretty original. Also a minor flaw, how did the narrator gather an army of the best Minecraft players? From the story, it seems that this herculeab task was performed in minutes, as if all the players just were on the server.

So to sum up: slow the flow a bit, don't shoehorn other pastas in your stories, and stay original. Your stories are original, so please remain like that!