Talk:Aparoid/@comment-33430270-20190206000223

ok, theres a few problems here.

1. barely any grammar or punctuation.

2. you didnt immediately notice the face? the face thats the exact opposite color of the background and stands out like a sore thumb?

3. this is not a well written pasta. i am actually baffled that a human could be stupid enough to think that this was well written.

4. "bite" is not a power. and not once in the story did aparoid use telekinesis, black holes and a mob spawner.

5. where did the name "aparoid" come from, anyhow?

this story gets a 6.75/10 from me.