Talk:.unknown/@comment-29854599-20161031003507

Hey!

I made a LOT of grammar edits. I know that someone wrote on the actual article that "this is a crappy and outdated article with many grammar mistakes". Don't you worry! I fixed most of the grammar mistakes. And I don't think that this is crappy at all. Anyways, please let me know if there's other grammar mistakes.

I noticed that there were a lot of run-on sentences that were loosely connected with an "and". It is better in grammar to have moderately long sentences that use a wide-range of conjunctions such as but, yet, or, and nor.

I hope I'm not boring you. Nice story, by the way!