Talk:Abandoned Mojang/@comment-32659957-20180429014400

Honestly, you need to find a way to keep your story on track. First, there was a guy that was recording himself going into a building, claiming tat it was for his girlfriend. Then he finds an Abandoned Steve? Okay.

He gets outs out a gun and says that the reason that he went into that plzce is to show everyoe how brave he is. This is where the story and the character's motive goes off the rails.

Soon, he's shooting eberything and now there's animatronics that pop up. Then things keep adding up, then it gets even crazier from there.

Not trying to offend you or anything, but next time, find something to focus on. Maybe this "Abandoned Steve" character. How did he know to call him that? Last of all, I don't get hos the picture is relevant to the story.