Talk:Eric The TNT Creeper/@comment-39696137-20190606052023

Huh, not too bad for a first, though I would recommend a more original idea in general. The ending was kinda abrupt and I think you need more detail. Due to the lack of detail, it failed to give readers 'The Chill' you get when reading creepypastas. I'm sure you'll improve, though. Not bad! :)

Characters: 6/10. Their personalities were clear enough to understand.

Storyline: 5/10. I felt like this one had no planning or rhythm. It was especially too sudden and unrealistic when Eric The TNT Creeper came out of your IPad and got sucked in. Though I understand that Eric switched places with you and sucked you into Minecraft, it still doesn't make sense and feels a little...lazy.

I enjoyed the story still. I'm actually kind of impressed that you can make such a first creepypasta! I mean, my first sucked, too. :')

TOTAL= 5.5/10