Talk:COLDBLOODDATA/@comment-27644942-20160304130211

Um, I like how this was combined with reality to make it a little extra-creepier. I like it, it did have some cliches every here and there though. ;)


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You should work on swearing less and make it longer.

Overall, it's good for a first creepypasta.