Thread:SCP-Deadlock/@comment-27617351-20160613131030

heres what i got so far tell me what you think

Ghost are the soles of the dead wich still live in the world of the living. Stories of ghosts are some of the oldest   legends in the world. Yet no ghost story could be as strange as the story of vine island. Lets start our story. The year is 2015. The place is the caribbean   island of daminca. For a man called John sevs it seemed like a normal vacation. It would be anything but that. It all started wen He came to the islands museum of piracy. The museum had things like pieaces of pirate ships and gold found in the recks of pirate ships. Then he came to a small modal of a white ship in a glass case with the words “the ghost ship of vine island” on it. John read the note next to it. It said “ this mysterious ghost is legendary on this island it sails near the ghostly island of vines   warn you do not go to the island of the vines” John didn’t really understand. “don’t understand?” said someone next to him. John turned around to see who had said it. “you don’t understand do you” she said again. “No I don’t” said John. “no one really does, alive that is” said the girl. “What do you know of this? You don’t look like your from this island, more like California or some were near there” said John “I was born in the united but I have lived here for 2 years I first came wen I was 19” she said.”So what do you know about the ghost ship?” said John. “far to much” said the girl before walking away quickly. The way she had said “far to much” sounded like the way someone would talk about a murder. That night John was in his motel room sleeping wen he heard a ghostly voice. He couldn’t understand what it had said at first but the next time he could. It seemed to be saying “ you have heard you have heard you have heard” over and over again. After it had stop John got up to see if he could find were the sounded had come from. He looked out the window of the room. All he saw was the ocean beach the lights from a few other buildings and the rainforest. Then it happened. A nightmarish scream filed the room. It didn’t sounded humen, though not like an animal he had ever heard. It was devilish. John left the room in horror. Out side there was a hotel worker. “you look like you just saw a ghost” she said. “did you just hear that” sad John. “heard what” she said? “That scream” said John. “I don’t know what you are talking about” said the hotel   worker. “never mind” said John slowly. He went back into his hotel room. “something is going on but what” John thought. Then he heard another scream. Unlike the last scream it sounded humen and it was coming from out side the hotel. He then run out it see what it was. Wen he had left the hotel There was a crowd of others. “They heard it this time” He said to himself. As he got closer he realized that there was a dead man! He had no wounds on his body at all. “Its Ewerd Hamilton” said one person in the crowd. “Who” said John. “He can to the island to study the legend of vine island” said the man next to John. A shock of fear went through him right then. “this can’t be real its like some horror novel” thought   John. He walked away in terror. As he was leaving He saw   the girl from the museum. “It is time for you to know” she said. “I am going to vine island” she said. “wen” John said john. “In 2 days   are you coming”   she said. “to find the truth about this I’ll go to the sun! Whats your name” said John. “My name is Jain” she said. “I need to go now I will see you again soon I have something else do find out” said Jain. She then left. After that John decided to study some more   about the vine island legend. He went to the islands library. He asked the librarian if he had any books on it. The librarian told John that he did and showed a book about it. John started to read. “The ghost ship of vine island is said to be the ship of captain edwerd Sevs” he read. “sevs that’s my last name” thought John. John also read that the ships crew had mutinied   and after words the ship had crash into the cliffs of vine island   and that their ghost haunt that island and if a sevs ever came to a near bye island they would haunt it to. “Its true” John thought. He put the book own and then heard a scream! He looked to were it had came and saw the librarian face down on the floor. He then got up only his eyes were pure white! He walked to John and grabed his neck! John struck him in the face and fell back into the book shelf! It started to fall for word. John jumped out of the wall but the librarian was an old man a could not move very fast the books and the book shelf landed right on him! Wen the shelf   Hit him in the head he turned to water! John was shocked! “This can’t be real it can’t be it just can’t be” He said. He left the building in a hast. He decided to buy some kinda of wepen. He found a store and got a pistol and 10 rounds of ammunition. 2 days pasted without any weird happening. It was the day he would go to vine island. He was out side the hotel   wondering what would happen wen he came to the island. Then Jain appeared. “Are you ready. This could meen death you do no that. I there will be 15 others though.” She said. “Ok I’m ready” said John. “We may have to go back several   times” said Jain. “alright” said John. They walked to a   large boat docked on   a small dock. The boats crew seemed to look nervies. They got on the boat and begain to sail of. “Where is this vine island” said John. “About 90 miles from the maine island” said Jain. The boat soon came into a dark mist  . John could have sworn he heard ghostly laughing. “I don’t believe in ghost but now…” said the captain. Then they came out of the thick mist and came into thinner mist. There was what looked like a 1700s ship. “what on earth” said one crew member. “The ghost ship” said Jain. Then they heard   what sounded like a cannon. A round object was shot torts them. At first they thought it as a cannon ball but the show realized that it was a skull! The skull crashed into the boat smoke was poring out of it. John pulled out his pistol aimed for the ship and fired! He had no real way of knowing if he had hit what   ever was on it though. “we should get away from here” said Jain. So the sailed back. “I am having a hard time believing   this my self” said John “I know’ said a crew member whos name was   Bob. “We should go back get wepens and then return” said Jain. So they started to go back. As they sailed back to daminca something strange was moving in the water. ‘What is that” said John. “Looks like a sea serpent” said Joe. “After whats bin happening I’ll believe anything” said Jain. The sea serpent swam back into the sea. It looked about   15 feet long and 2 feet wide. “I have a feeling that this is not the last time we will see that thing” said John. As they sailed on they saw splashing in the water. As they got closer they found it to be a huge squid! As they got closer it dove back down to the deeps. “Thoughs things only live 1000 of feet under water” said Bob. “There is something going” said Jain. “There is something I need to tell you” said John. “what?” said Jain. Then John told her about what had happened in the library and about the captain with hes last name and the rest. “I am shocked” said Jain. “I had idea that it was I don’t know how to say it” she said. “That’s what happening” she said. “Its because of you and   the cruse, but we can’t give up now after something like this I don’t know how anyone could give up” said Jain. “Your right” said Bob. “You don’t have to its you this..this force wants” said Jain to John. “No I am not giving up” said John. “good said Jain



   “We have bigger problems   it looks like theres a storm coming” said the captain as a flash of lightning ripped across the sky. “your right” said Jain. A wave smashed into the side of the boat and wind blew a more then 100 miles an hour. The boat had not control   over were it went. It was swept back and fourth back and fourth again and again. “I don’t think we have much of a chance of making it” said Jain but no one could here her over the sound of the storm. As the storm range for about an hour. The boat had crashed into the shore of an island. The island looked erie. it had large clouds of mist   and all over its beach   and its rainforest was thick with vines. “This is it” said Jain slowly “vine island”. “It looks haunted all right” said Bob. The boat was washed up about 7 feet on to shore. “I think we’ll have to wait for the tied to come in” said the capten. As they waited one sailor decided   to take a walk down the beach. After about an hour he decided to start walking back. As he walked back he saw a strange object   in the sand. As he bent down to pike it up a bony hand grabed him from behinded and another grabed his neck! He then struck back at the thing but nothing happened. Then he felt him self being biten by something he kicked backwords at it. Still nothing. Then everthing went blank. Then is thing pulled the body into the forest. The thing came to a hut and pulled the body into it. There was a man in a hood in the hut. He placed the body on a wooden table and through a   powder of so kind on him while saying “rise oh   dead man rise”. Then he opend his eyes but they were pure white. He got up. “Drive the invators off the island” said the hooded man. The man or the thing who was once and man started to walk to the door with out saying a word. He started to walk to the beach were the boat had recked. One sailor had gone off a little ways into the woods. He started attacking him. The sailor was shock one cuz it was someone in his on crew and two from this pure white eyes. The sounded of the fight had been here by the others. They came running to see what was happening. Wen they got the sailor who had been attacked was dead and the other was covered in blood. Wen John saw the pure white eyes he know what it ment so he pulled out his pistol, aimed and faired! Went the white eyed   man was shot he turned into water. “There has just got to be a logical explanation for all of this” said Jain. “I am going to find it even if its my death” said John. “We better be leaving now. The tieds coming in if we don’t we’ll be stuck here for another day” said the captain. “but we must return some day” said John. “Yes “ said everyone at the same time. As they sailed back John went below deck to take a nap. As he sleeped he dreamed that he stud on a beach. Jain was next to him. Her eyes were pure white. Then the rest of the crew rose from the sea with the pure white eyes. He pulled his gun and tried to shoot knowing that it wasn’t really the people he kew just there bodys and that they were already dead. His gun wouldn’t shoot for some reason. Then he couldn’t move at all and ice started to cover his body! Then he awoke. 16 hours ago More 