Talk:Entity 009/@comment-36530255-20190605222146

Lemme break this down.

1. " I saw a weird redstone torch right next to my lava pit of cooking I was confused..." What is this sentance trying to convey? Its hard to see what is going on. There are many other sentances like this which makes the story hard to enjoy. Overall, the grammar is pretty bad.

2. "luckly I was able to stop them by covering them in bed rock and killing them I never saw entity 009 again " How was this entity named entity 009? How did the main charecter figure this out?

3. "It summoned 6 raids at max level 6 ender dragons and 6 withers" Action sequence is quicker than quick and it is extremely boring. I suggest adding a bit more description when writing out this entities actions, because they don't at all appear interesting.

Score: 1/10

This is not more than my opinion, and if you continue writing I hope it improves. No harm intended here. I've had my fair share of critism as well :-)