Talk:Player 1212/@comment-43548170-20200127181446/@comment-36530255-20200127185413

Here is my reveiw.

Grammar (which I ended up fixing): 3/10. It was very readable, yet there were one too many exclamation points and plenty of misspellings. Along with improper capitalizations and long running sentances. Also, some sentances didn't make sense.

Story: 3/10. I didn't really find it scary because of all the clichés. A player somehow joins the singleplayer world which is mildly unoriginal, and proceeds to get enraged when the narrator doesn't enjoy their appearance. Then they leave the game for no reason, only to return and wreak havoc on the narrator. Also I can't tell whether the narrator's vision darkened in real life or in game, but it doesn't really serve any purpose as they state right after that Player 1212 appears. And about that post getting removed from the forums for no reason, that seems very similar to what happened with Herobrine.

Charecters: 5/10. Despite Player 1212's motives were a bit overused, at least he had them instead of causing trouble for no reason. I wish he got a little backstory though, as the fact that he says he had suffered before serves no purpose and it almost sounds like he is doing all that stuff for no reason, despite that is not the case. As for the narrator, he/she doesn't really matter.

Overall: 11/30