Talk:The Sentient Character/@comment-33430270-20190205215405

ok few problems here. 1. why again wont you post the notes? 2. the inclusion of other creepypastas just killed the story. its completely redundant and it feels like you're just shoving your own thing in their own story. 3. if you wont tell us her backstory why bother telling us she has a tragic one? 4. about the beginning parts, there should be more enteries than just 4 of them. 5. nice shoehorned pics at the end there. honestly, if theres one thing this pasta says to me, its shoehorning. and with that, i give it a 5.5/10