Talk:TestAccount1/@comment-36530255-20181010232110

Good story, but here is a good tip: good grammar. It will make it easier for other users to real and enjoy your story. Capitalize your "I"s and creat a space after every comma (and don't make a capitalized word after a comma unless its a name of some sort).

Example: Instead of, "i was walking and suddenly a large,Dark figure teleported in front of me." It would be better like this, "I was walking and suddenly a large, dark entity teleported in front of me."

Now I understand we don't all have Microsoft word and its hard to fix grammar errors, but the things I just listed are pretty easy.

Other than that, I'd give your story an 8/10. Keep up the great work!

(Also I'm a grammar Nazi so be mean to me if you want)