Thread:GREEN0704/@comment-30319843-20171007191726

So I've recently observed you rushing your pastas in somewhat manner. Here's some advice: don't rush your pastas. It just makes it all quick for the reader. You need to describe everything that occurs during the events, ok? It creates a sense for the reader and allows him/her to visualize the events going on in his/her minds.

At the same time, don't describe everything too much as it can terribly slow down the story. Also, focus on one particular tense--- past or present. Present can be in used in past tense stories when refering to thoughts of a character, or general statements. If you are narrating it in present tense, then you can use past tense as well only for referring to past events.

Overall, the timeline and plot of your stories went very well. Keep on writing, bro! 