Talk:Frost Girl/@comment-36530255-20190201234032

Its time I change my opinion. The only problem I have with this story is the ending. The climax really had me liking this story until this, "You may be wondering why I am telling you this now. Well, I'm on the HiveMC server playing Splegg. I just eliminated a player. The player was called frostgirl." The end! This completely kills the story. The set up was good and all, with the disappearance of Max. It is a bit creepy, but a little more information would have made the story even more creepy. What happened to Max, and what does Frost Girl (or Mraz) have to do with it? The ending is completely off! The narrator is basically saying, "Oh! I just encountered this user name Frost Girl on a server. I'm just going to assume she has somthing to do with the Frost Girl from earlier becuase why not? Nothing interesting happens that points out to Frost Girl being the cause of Max's disappearance, so I am just going to include this random event which will possibly some up the fact that she is evil." And there you have it, an over simplified explanation of a messy plot hole.