Talk:Eric The TNT Creeper/@comment-26533608-20190605070109

Alright, I'll play along.

Considering this is your first pasta, I'll be a little less harsh.

Characters: 5/10 - There's virtually nothing about anyone in this pasta and what little there is seems to show a sense that they have no personality and no empathy. Case in point, you (in the story) don't care about the fact that your friends just died. If you're trying to write a normal person, please try and write emotions and personality in.

Storyline: 4/10 - No offence, but this story is rather unoriginal (playing Minecraft, all-powerful entity does bad stuff for the sake of it) and there's no unique selling point that sets it apart and makes it creepy. The 'plot twist' at the end, aka every other Minecraft fanfic, does absolutely nothing for the story.

Total: 4.5/10 (in terms of first pastas)